nancyfulda ([info]nancyfulda) wrote,
@ 2008-06-24 15:27:00
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Seamless Exposition (aka: How to Infodump without Looking Like It)
So yesterday I had an epiphany.

I've known forever that there are a lot of ways to feed exposition to the reader: dialogue, narrative summary, flashbacks, etc. The problem is, I've seen every one of these methods fall flat on its face at least as often as I've seen it succeed. I knew the different ways to infodump, but I couldn't figure what distinguishes good dumps from bad ones.

Here's my epiphany: You have to create an event to tie the exposition to.

Exposition for its own sake is a story-stopper. It interferes with the action, annoys the reader, and is frequently viewed as boring.

Exposition tied to an event progresses the story, heightens conflict (by helping to clarify stakes for the reader), and begins to feel indispensable rather than klunky.

Example: In my work-in-progress, the main character's mother died while performing a dangerous activity. I started thinking about events that might link to this fact and remembered that in Chapter 3 Mikaena's father and uncle are arguing about whether Mikaena should be allowed to perform a potentially dangerous task. It was a relatively minor matter to tweak this conversation so that it explodes into an argument about whether or not Uncle is to blame for Mikaena's mother's death.

It would have made a great lead-in to an expository paragraph about how Mikaena's mother died, but in the end, I didn't even need that. The argument itself conveyed all the important points. Voila! Infodump tied to event = seamless exposition.

Obviously, this technique may not work all the time. But I've already found it extremely useful, and I'm certainly going to be applying it frequently in the future.



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[info]wbledbetter
2008-06-24 02:21 pm UTC (link)
Good stuff...I need to make a conscious effort to use that more often.

-Bill Ledbetter

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[info]howardtayler
2008-06-24 02:55 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for articulating this. I find myself needing to infodump all the time, and the times it works best are the times that there's the chatter of weapon-fire in the background. :-)

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[info]dsgood
2008-06-24 04:50 pm UTC (link)
See the opening of Robert Penn Warren's All the King's Men for one variation. It's an infodump in the form of driving directions.

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[info]j_cheney
2008-06-24 05:21 pm UTC (link)
I have a friend in my writer's group who insists that you can't slip bits of exposition into a story (say, in between lines of dialog...if that's what they're talking about). He thinks prose should read like a screenplay, with the set-up first, and the action or dialog separate.

I do hope he reads this....

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[info]david_de_beer
2008-06-24 10:06 pm UTC (link)
with the set-up first,

that gets touted a lot for fiction opening as well (speaking of which, I really ought to make an effort to get a post in there before week's end so we all have at least a bit of direction on 13 lines.)

I know and agree with what Nancy says, although I'll add it's not always that easy. It often comes down to knowing what to leave out that won't confuse readers so the story doesn;t bog down, and which background matter matters.

Now having said that, it can get taken too far as well, with infodumpt and exposition worked "seamlessly" into the story, especially with dialogue, and then the author gets accused of withholding information, or the characters don't sound like their speaking, they're just there to clue the reader in as to the background details in a "natural" way.

This is a very old rule of fiction, characters don't talk "do you remember that time when my wife died?" "oh, yes, it was tragic, and such a lovely day too. Your daughter was only three wasn't she?"
bad examples, but the principle is worth cautioning against. People don't talk that way; they'd both remember it and not need to remind each other.

So, yeah, Nancy has a good rule of thumb here, but it's also worth mentioning the extreme end it can get taken too.

personally, I think that a little bit of infodump or quick para of exposition here and there is not so bad, just keep me clued in and don't try all kinds of literary pyrotechnics to make it not look like exposition.

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[info]j_cheney
2008-06-24 10:11 pm UTC (link)
And I have to admit, I'm on the other end, usually...not enough info. Still working on it ;o)

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[info]nancyfulda
2008-06-25 09:28 am UTC (link)
It's a balancing act, no doubt about it. Too much info and the reader gets bored. Too little, and the reader gets lost.

By the way, I agree that there's nothing wrong with a quick para of exposition -- or even several -- as long as it's directly relevent to the events at hand.

The most common exposition-related mistake I see from new authors is blobs of information that have been dropped into the text, not because it has any bearing on the current scene, but because "the reader will need to know this later".

Bad. Bad bad bad bad bad.

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[info]aliettedb
2008-06-25 08:14 pm UTC (link)
Oh yes. Bad (and I've done before, and I know better now). Handling exposition, especially in spec fic, is always pretty hard, though. There's a steep learning curve, and I'm still on it.

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[info]jp_davis
2008-06-25 10:29 am UTC (link)
It's funny how writing tricks like this work-- I think a lot of them you can sort of learn from just writing, but you don't really understand it or get the full benefit until someone articulates exactly what it is you're doing. This post was totally one of those "Ho yeah, that's how it works!" moments for me.

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Infodump in and out of fashion
(Anonymous)
2008-06-29 03:34 am UTC (link)
The infodump may be a matter of fashion. Currently, it is out of fashion, but it was not always so. Yesterday I read a Joe Haldeman story published in Galaxy magazine in 1974. The story has pages of infodump, but it works.

Times change and we change with them.

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